Wednesday, November 9, 2011
Poem advice and feedback please :)?
This is a decent poem but it really doesn't much remind me of Emily Bronte. Your emotions are all over the place in this poem. In the first verse you seem aggitated, next it's dark and scary sounding but you are all of a sudden super happy, then you are completely at ease and in the last verse you now like the animals.... with no explanation as to how, what or why. You covered the when and where pretty well though so good job there. I think you need a second verse that explains why you went from bothersome to happy or change the fourth line in the first verse to be more positive sounding rather than bothered by the toads and birds.
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